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9:30 PM, Tuesday March 7th 2023

Organic arrows: Good job on making them flow through 3d space and compressing on the farther end! And also, extra points for making the tip of the arrow turn, too! i do notice wobbley lineweight though, so remember: line weight is always applied confidently!

Organic forms: Very solid, great work! you did a great job in gradually making the ellipses and contour curves in the center less visible than the one that are more near to the end of the sausages

Texture analysis: Perhaps the second texture's gradient had a slight sudden transition in the middle towards sparse, but that's okay in my book. Props for not scribbling!

Dissections: Great job!! You break the silhouette when needed and also rounded your forms

Form intersections: Good job on maintaing your shapes shallow and equilateral! A small tip for your future warmups where you do this exercise again: Install a 3d software on your pc and try to replicate the intersections you make so that you can make sure they are done correctly (but only do so after commiting to marking the intersection)

Organic intersections: One issue that i found here is that in the second page, the big sausage wouldn'nt have one side standing up like that. Maybe if you'd add another sausage right next to it to make that happen sure, but like this it feels too unnatural. by nature, it'd be laying flat on the floor (you can picture in your mind how it'd look it).

Overall a fantastic submission with minor errors you'll hopefully work on, if you'd like to work on your textures you can begin the 25 texture challenge as a side-quest from your next lesson. But anyway, you're now ready for the leafy lesson...

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... Lesson 3!

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3:58 PM, Wednesday March 8th 2023

Thank you so much for taking time to critique my lesson 2, I have been waiting for a long time. It was worth it!

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A lot of my students use these. The last time I used them was when I was in high school, and at the time I felt that they dried out pretty quickly, though I may have simply been mishandling them. As with all pens, make sure you're capping them when they're not in use, and try not to apply too much pressure. You really only need to be touching the page, not mashing your pen into it.

In terms of line weight, the sizes are pretty weird. 08 corresponds to 0.5mm, which is what I recommend for the drawabox lessons, whereas 05 corresponds to 0.45mm, which is pretty close and can also be used.

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