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2:34 PM, Saturday May 11th 2024
Hi, I'm Znorb, and I'm going to do your lesson 2 critique:
Arrows
I see you are doing a great job on the size of the arrows, the size of the arrows should become smaller because they're getting farther away
There are some things you can improve on, for example, some arrows have edges that don't overlap (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/1e23d6b7.jpg)
Organic forms
The main thing I can see is that some of the organic sausages you draw are elongated and thin. Don't try to make the shape too long. Try to make the sausage shape more simple, like if the shape was 2 spheres of similar size connected by a tube with a consistent width:
https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/contourlines
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/5616829d.jpg
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/0128c0e3.jpg
Textures
When doing the textures, try to not make chicken scratching, focus more on the shape of the cast shadow and then fill it. In the texture analysis video demonstration shows a way to do this
Textures in organic forms
Something I could say about the textures is that some of the textures should break the silhouette. When drawing the texture, don't be afraid of breaking the silhouette, because it helps you understanding how the form of the texture works and how it wraps around the sausage. For example, in the strawberry texture, you could've put seeds that break the silhouette of the shape, and in the pangolin texture, the shapes of the pangolin should break the silhouette
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/423fe2b2.jpg
Form intersections
I see you are doing great with the boxes intersection page. In the other pages you should've added more shaped, like in the box page.
Other thing I see is that some of the boxes have a more distorted perspective than others, remember that the boxes should have a very similar distortion, so is recommended to make the boxes with less dramatic distortion (https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/503600256374669324/1092172418488995851/Untitled.jpg?ex=66407314&is=663f2194&hm=c5c8d3d31f93eee78f4065b27e515219d85b487055b79160486c771c908c75ee&) . Besides that, I see you did a great job on the form intersections page
Organic intersections
I can see the same mistake on the organic intersections about the form. Try to not overcomplicate the shapes of the saugages, try to stick on simple sausages (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/4213ce18.jpg)
I can see that some of the shapes aren't laying, when doing the shapes, try to lay all the sausages in perpendicular, keep in mind that the sausages are 3d and they have volume (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/5de674b5.jpg)
And again, try to not do chicken scratching when doing the shapes of the cast shadows
After all of this, I can see that you are getting better at drawing, and if you continue practicing the exercises of the lesson 2 and lesson 1, you will become better and you will see the mistakes of your previous drawings.
I will mark this lesson as completed, keep practicing the concepts of the other lessons having in mind the corrections, good luck with the lesson 3!!
You should check the texture challenge too, it will help you a lot with the texturing.
Next Steps:
Lesson 3
Drawabox-Tested Fineliners (Pack of 10, $17.50 USD)
Let's be real here for a second: fineliners can get pricey. It varies from brand to brand, store to store, and country to country, but good fineliners like the Staedtler Pigment Liner (my personal brand favourite) can cost an arm and a leg. I remember finding them being sold individually at a Michael's for $4-$5 each. That's highway robbery right there.
Now, we're not a big company ourselves or anything, but we have been in a position to periodically import large batches of pens that we've sourced ourselves - using the wholesale route to keep costs down, and then to split the savings between getting pens to you for cheaper, and setting some aside to one day produce our own.
These pens are each hand-tested (on a little card we include in the package) to avoid sending out any duds (another problem with pens sold in stores). We also checked out a handful of different options before settling on this supplier - mainly looking for pens that were as close to the Staedtler Pigment Liner. If I'm being honest, I think these might even perform a little better, at least for our use case in this course.
We've also tested their longevity. We've found that if we're reasonably gentle with them, we can get through all of Lesson 1, and halfway through the box challenge. We actually had ScyllaStew test them while recording realtime videos of her working through the lesson work, which you can check out here, along with a variety of reviews of other brands.
Now, I will say this - we're only really in a position to make this an attractive offer for those in the continental United States (where we can offer shipping for free). We do ship internationally, but between the shipping prices and shipping times, it's probably not the best offer you can find - though this may depend. We also straight up can't ship to the UK, thanks to some fairly new restrictions they've put into place relating to their Brexit transition. I know that's a bummer - I'm Canadian myself - but hopefully one day we can expand things more meaningfully to the rest of the world.